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Cmdr. Friendly Enginer

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Ok this is where ill post stuff, wont be any posing yet, ill be writing up a story (bit boring but meh) so yeah
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Eden story line (for lack of a better name) (also its going to be a long one).
 
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Cmdr. Friendly Enginer

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i would appreciate some feedback so far.. cause i have no idea if anyone is liking this
 

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i would appreciate some feedback so far.. cause i have no idea if anyone is liking this
Well for starters, this whole first paragraph has two periods in it, meaning the entire thing is made of huge run-on sentences.
-Main deck of the Eden-
The main deck is a small room with a large amount of computers and navigation equipment, in the center is the outline of a panel in the floor to reveal a star map or a briefing table using holograms Across the room in-front of a oversized window leading into space is a group of fold-able chairs surrounding a large pilot seat, in the fold-able seats are two young men with a young woman seated in the middle of them while an older looking man is standing holding a holographic tablet while a masked man sits in the pilot seat, the man on the left of the woman is clad in heavy Armour with multiple belts of ammunition slung over his shoulders and a gunner patch neatly embroiled onto his left arm, The man sighs heavily showing his deep and darkened eyes while his thick jawline is visible and his short black hair reflects the artificial light. The man to the woman's right is the complete opposite, he dons a bright white lab coat and neat trousers and like his counterpart has goggles however they are worn on-top of his head hiding his short blonde hair and slightly obscuring his eyes, while his jawline isn't as pronounced its still quite thick, he is quite smaller than the other man on his left but still quite large there is a research patch on his arm placed there with a sticker, the woman in-between the two wears a light blue jumpsuit with an wrench icon on the shoulder, she has red hair cut surprisingly short and like the others has goggles however she has hers over her eyes with them just barely covering her eyes.
The man in the pilot seat wears a deep black jumpsuit with a green tube going into a cold war style pilot helmet with a black tinted visor, he has a silver pilot icon on a armband over the flight suit. the final person the older man wears a smart orange suit with a light blue line going down the whole jacket, he has a neatly trimmed beard and mustache and his hair is covered by a captains hat, he has a star on his shoulder to represent captain.
It's just hard to read when there are no breaks in the paragraph, or really any punctuation at all.
 

Cmdr. Friendly Enginer

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Well for starters, this whole first paragraph has two periods in it, meaning the entire thing is made of huge run-on sentences.

It's just hard to read when there are no breaks in the paragraph, or really any punctuation at all.
ok sounds good